A. Self-evaluation of Midterm test - 10%

My purpose in writing the text is to demonstrate how the author, Margaret Atwood easily creates a simple atmosphere, yet very powerful  by using specific words to play with our imagination.
I use this type of introduction: In my introduction, I stated a fact.
This is a suggestion for improving the introduction or having a more effective one: I should introduce by using a more captivating fact.

In paragraph 1, the thesis statement or the main idea of the text is to prove how the reader relates to the story by Atwood's imperative verbs and use of first person pronouns.

This is a suggestion for improving the thesis statement or having a more effective one: I can greatly improve my text by adding a few transition words and using a richer vocabulary.

The topic sentence in -
paragragh 2 is ... Relationship between the reader and the story
paragragh 3 is ... Fiction world created by a figure of speech

The supporting points (paraphrased) I use in -
paragragh 2 are ... Examples from the story (In quotations)
paragragh 3 are ... Definition (of the figure of speech: repetition) and example

I can add more detail in -
paragragh 2 ...
paragragh 3 ...

The transitional words or phrases I use in -
paragragh 2 are ... ``For example``,
paragragh 3 are ... None, unfortunately (One of the many things I need to fix)

The coordinating or subordinating expressions I use in -
paragragh 2 are ... None (To be improved)
paragragh 3 are ... None (To be improved)

Here is my suggestion for improving the conclusion: I could end with a better opening sentence. For example, I could state another great story by Margaret Atwood.

I could improve the content of the text by adding more concrete examples and definitions.

I could improve the organization of the text by adding more transitional words and better punctuation.

I could improve the development of the text by showing and demonstrating more figures of speech for better comprehension. But that's not the only thing I would like to improve. In fact, I also think I could be less redundant in terms of vocabulary.

I could improve the sentence style of the text by..
-Using transitional words: ''Furthermore, one of the many reasons why we (the readers) feel connected to the short story...''
-Starting a sentence with an adjective: ''Unique and oustanding, her writing style is, ...'' instead of ''In fact, I truly think her writing style is unique and outstanding...''
-Using the formula: ''To+Verb'': ''To create a such atmosphere of imagination...''


I could improve the vocabulary by :
-Looking for richer words in dictionnary
-Being less repetitive by looking in a Thesaurus
-Making a list of specific words before writing the text (Plan)
-Using collocations (Words that often go together)
I could improve the grammar by ... (give five examples)

I could improve the spelling by
-Looking for words in the dictionnary
-Reading, highlighting words that I'm unsure of
-Editing (based on the previous example)
What I liked most about my first text is the fact that I managed to add an adequate thesis. (Compared to what I did back in High School)

What I liked least about my first text is that I was lacking experience so many things were missing (such as transitional words)